My hollowed heart echoes
The sounds of tears
That fall down the chamber
And explode with the roar
Of a waterfall; but the sound
Falls deaf, for no traveler
Will enter a hollowed heart that echoes.
My hollowed heart roars with thunder,
Dangerous to all travelers that wander.
I really love your first two lines. It drew me in right away. Overall, it’s a great poem. Keep it up!
I’d really appreciate if you could also give me feedback on my latest poem. I’m new to blogging and would love to get all the feedback I can get. https://reviewinglife365.wordpress.com/2016/10/13/it-consumes-me/
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